必修第一册Unit1 Back to school主题写作评价作业

【当日巩固】

一、

假定你是某国际学校的学生李华，针对你校学生环保意识淡薄，浪费现象严重等情况，请你给校长Smith先生写一封信，建议在学校开展“绿色校园”活动一培养学生良好的生活习惯，加强环保意思，共建美好校园。

注意：1. 词数100词左右

      2. 可以适当增加细节，使行文连贯

Step 1句子翻译

1. 正常观察到很多学生在日常生活中浪费水、电甚至食物。

_______________________________ many students waste water，electricity and even food in their daily life.

2. 此外，他们没有足够关注环境保护。

____________, they don’t ___________________________ protecting the environment.

3. 我写信是为了提议绿色校园运动。

_______________________________________ the “Green Campus” activity.

4. 首先，我建议号召学生种植树木花卉美化环境。

First, I suggest ______________ students to plant some trees and flowers to _________________________.

5. 此外，学生应该被教育养成合理使用资源和节约能量的好习惯。

Besides, students should be educated _____________________ using resources properly and saving energy.

6. 最后，组织一些演讲比赛或者知识竞赛来提升保持绿色校园的意识，也是个不错的主意。

_______________________, ______________________ to organize some speech contests or knowledge competitions to ______________________ keeping the campus green.

7. 希望你觉得合理，如果你接受我的建议，我会很感激。

I hope you will ___________________ and _____________________ you could accept my suggestions.

Step 2 连句成篇

Dear Smith,

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 Yours,

Li Hua

二、

学校英语报正在酝酿改版，拟从现有的三个栏目（健康，文化，娱乐）中删除一个，并从三个备选栏目（时尚，职业规划，读者反馈）中挑选一个纳入到该报。假设你是该校学生李华，请你给校英语编辑写一封100词左右的电子邮件，提出你的建议。内容包括：

1. 你建议删除的栏目及删除的理由

2. 你建议增加的栏目及增加的理由

注意：1. 邮件的开头和结尾已经写好，不计入总词数。

      2. 可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。

Step 1 自我写作

Dear Editor,

I’ve learned that our school English newspaper is going to replace one of the three existing columns with a new one. _________________________________________________________

____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Yours sincerely,

Li Hua

Step 2 作文评价

1. 篇章结构：书信格式、合理分段

2. 内容要点：涵盖要点、没有遗漏

3. 语言表达：词汇得体、语法正确

Step 3 升格写作

Dear Editor,

I’ve learned that our school English newspaper is going to replace one of the three existing columns with a new one. _________________________________________________________

____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Yours sincerely,

Li Hua

【本周巩固】

1. 了解掌握建议信的基本格式和框架

2. 作文素材本整理：关于浪费和环保主题的建议信、关于删除及增加栏目的建议信。

3. 其它内容回顾

【本月巩固】

答案：

一、

Dear Smith,

It can be commonly observed that many students waste water，electricity and even food in their daily life. In addition, they don’t pay enough attention to protecting the environment. Therefore, I’m writing to offer a proposal for the “Green Campus” activity.

First, I suggest calling on students to plant some trees and flowers to beautify the environment. Besides, students should be educated to forma good habit of using resources properly and saving energy. Last but not least, it is also a good idea to organize some speech contests or knowledge competitions to increase the awareness of keeping the campus green.

I hope you will find it reasonable and I would appreciate it if you could accept my suggestions.

 Yours,

Li Hua

二、

Dear editor,

I’ve learned that our school English newspaper is going to replace one of the three existing columns with a new one. I am writing to express some of my opinions.

For me, I would choose "entertainment" to be eliminated. Although it's necessary for students to get some relaxation, I'm worried that the main news the entertainment column offers will eventually turn into celebrity gossip, which is neither helpful to the growth of students nor to the development of our school. As for the column to be added, I highly recommend "career planning". Right now many students still have absolutely no idea about what they truly want to become in the future, so it's quite urgent to have them understand what different types of jobs are like and the qualities required. This may make students aware of their strengths and weaknesses, thus figuring out their goals.

I'm looking forward to your reply.

Yours sincerely,

Li Hua

本文是一封建议信，首先点明写信目的是对校报改版表达观点。建议去除“娱乐”栏目，理由是尽管学生需要放松，但娱乐栏目内容可能演变为名人八卦，对学生成长和学校发展无帮助，使用了“which is neither...nor...”非限制性定语从句增强表达。建议增加“职业规划”栏目，原因是许多学生对未来职业方向迷茫，该栏目能帮助他们了解不同工作类型及所需品质，进而认识自身优缺点并明确目标，逻辑清晰，符合学生实际需求，语言平实且符合英语书信格式。